I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea hub and my teachers are whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Nice work this week. I think you answered the questions for the must read text very well. I also like how you showed the food group for fruit and vegetables is spilt in two, but I think it would have looked more effective if you add added photos as well. The healthy plate you made looks great and I can tell you have a good understanding of the food groups. The only thing I would have done differently is made the picture bigger so it is easier to see the pictures of food you used.
I really love how you included your plan for your writing and that you showed us how you organised your ideas. You have included some great ideas like the whole world having a meat shortage and I also like how you included a photo to show empty supermarket shelves. Just make sure you read your work before publishing. I noticed that you did not include many full stops which can make your story hard to read. Sometimes if you read a story out loud it can help you realise where you need to include fullstops.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia ora Sofia,
ReplyDeleteNice work this week. I think you answered the questions for the must read text very well. I also like how you showed the food group for fruit and vegetables is spilt in two, but I think it would have looked more effective if you add added photos as well.
The healthy plate you made looks great and I can tell you have a good understanding of the food groups. The only thing I would have done differently is made the picture bigger so it is easier to see the pictures of food you used.
I really love how you included your plan for your writing and that you showed us how you organised your ideas. You have included some great ideas like the whole world having a meat shortage and I also like how you included a photo to show empty supermarket shelves. Just make sure you read your work before publishing. I noticed that you did not include many full stops which can make your story hard to read. Sometimes if you read a story out loud it can help you realise where you need to include fullstops.