I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea hub and my teachers are whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Nice work this week. I really like the DLO you made about a healthy lifestyle, you have set it out very clearly and easy to read. Great work of text features such as tiles and pictures. I also liked your writing this week, it was a creative idea for your character to wake up and actually choose your own power. Just make sure you read through your work to make sure you have enough full stops. You're story is quite long, however you only have about 4 full stops. Sometimes when you read a story out loud it can help you realise where you need to add a full stop. You have done a great job of showing your working out with the math questions, well done. Next time remember to make sure any videos or other links you add to your slideshow can be view by others. You can do this by change the access of who can view them.
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or ask a question you want to know more about
Kia ora Sofia,
ReplyDeleteNice work this week. I really like the DLO you made about a healthy lifestyle, you have set it out very clearly and easy to read. Great work of text features such as tiles and pictures. I also liked your writing this week, it was a creative idea for your character to wake up and actually choose your own power. Just make sure you read through your work to make sure you have enough full stops. You're story is quite long, however you only have about 4 full stops. Sometimes when you read a story out loud it can help you realise where you need to add a full stop.
You have done a great job of showing your working out with the math questions, well done.
Next time remember to make sure any videos or other links you add to your slideshow can be view by others. You can do this by change the access of who can view them.