I am a Year 5 student at Papakura Central School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Kahikatea hub and my teachers are whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
This was my Reading,writing and math for the week.This week we had to draw/paint a mural that represents papakura check out my work to see the piece of art work that I designed.
Awesome work this week Sofia. I really enjoyed reading the timeline you created for Dua Lipa and I like how you included a picture of her. The mural you created for the STEAM project is beautiful and I liked the details you included in it. Next time, you could include a description about the mural and how it represents Papakura. Your writing this week was creative and I like how your character ended up in the book she was reading. Next time make sure you have enough full stops in your story. I suggest you read it out loud and that way you will notice when you need to add a fullstop. Another way to help edit your work is asking a family member to read it and see if they notice any errors.
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Awesome work this week Sofia. I really enjoyed reading the timeline you created for Dua Lipa and I like how you included a picture of her.
ReplyDeleteThe mural you created for the STEAM project is beautiful and I liked the details you included in it. Next time, you could include a description about the mural and how it represents Papakura.
Your writing this week was creative and I like how your character ended up in the book she was reading. Next time make sure you have enough full stops in your story. I suggest you read it out loud and that way you will notice when you need to add a fullstop. Another way to help edit your work is asking a family member to read it and see if they notice any errors.